Yeeeeee narratives!
I'd def introduce the narration flips. I had to listen through and read a couple of times to see just what lines were supposed to be said by this man. "
I like it when you bust out the imagery: "icy rain whipping his face", "train lights flickering", "circles the drain."
Did you ever listen to the No, I'm Sorry track of mine? Same kinda thing, just a quick 16ish I wrote about the homeless. When I stopped in the street and actually let myself really look at and think about these people it gets hard to move on.